Damn. I love it when canon is put to good use like that. ;)
The diction was beautiful. The character voices were spot-on; the dialogue sounded like stuff Ray and Fraser would say and the Ray narrative voice really clicked. The feeling of heat and dust came through so well, and the dancing was gorgeous.
I liked the believable buildup instead of just going straight to the porn. The sex is wonderful, but it's so much hotter when you get to it gradually instead of bam! Sexing! As for the sexing, that's some of the best written I've seen. I loved the lack of whose-cock-did-what; it was descriptive enough so you can be sure of what's going on but still vague enough to leave the imagination room to work. And oh, what wonderful work. My brain thanks you.
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The diction was beautiful. The character voices were spot-on; the dialogue sounded like stuff Ray and Fraser would say and the Ray narrative voice really clicked. The feeling of heat and dust came through so well, and the dancing was gorgeous.
I liked the believable buildup instead of just going straight to the porn. The sex is wonderful, but it's so much hotter when you get to it gradually instead of bam! Sexing! As for the sexing, that's some of the best written I've seen. I loved the lack of whose-cock-did-what; it was descriptive enough so you can be sure of what's going on but still vague enough to leave the imagination room to work. And oh, what wonderful work. My brain thanks you.